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| MesserInk 2007-11-18 ch 1,  | abuseI like poems that tell stories like this. Good job, I especially like part 4. |
| DarkAngelTwins 2004-09-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseLiteSide:(sobs) WAH! That was so...BEAUTIFUL!! ENTERNAL LOVE! BOO-HOO-HOO! DarkSide: I hope they rot in hell...without each other. LiteSide:How could you! They love each other! They should find each other and live happily for an enternity together in Heaven!! TRUE LOVE CONQUERS ALL! (bursts into tears and is unable to speak) DarkSide:(looking disgusted) Well, I think they suck. True love, pah! (spits on the ground) |
| DarkAngelTwins 2004-09-16 ch 1, anon. | abuseLiteSide:(sobs) WAH! That was so...BEAUTIFUL!! ENTERNAL LOVE! BOO-HOO-HOO! DarkSide: I hope they rot in hell...without each other. LiteSide:How could you! They love each other! They should find each other and live happily for an enternity together in Heaven!! TRUE LOVE CONQUERS ALL! (bursts into tears and is unable to speak) DarkSide:(looking disgusted) Well, I think they suck. True love, pah! (spits on the ground) |
| Raven-ember 2004-07-27 ch 1, | abuseOMG, this poem is awesome! It was so beautifully written! I loved it! You have a real talent!*adds to favorite lists* |
| tahayov 2004-04-30 ch 1, | abuseohh its a story poem.well u said it its sappy.but its more beautiful than u said u lied about that..well i liked it and it made me smile..but i wont say that i got it all some parts i didnt quite figure out..anyway nice work :) |
| atreju 2004-02-07 ch 1, | abuseOh! Wow! This is absolutely incredible, although a little confusing at times. It's very original; I love this idea. And the idea that they were both put back on Earth to be together, but only if they could find eachother before they died again. But wasn't that a nice thing for the devil to do? Too nice? I don't know, it's very thoughtful though. Please keep writing, I absolutely loved this! You have talent, especially in rhyming and just letting the words flow so naturally. |
| abitlessperfect 2003-05-21 ch 1, | abuseBravo! Not only is it particularly well-written, I fell in love with the rhyme scheme in the first sentence! Ah, it must have taken quite a bit of focus to write this (more than I can muster, that's for sure) Either way, its very good...Exceptional infact. Great work! |
| Ilsa Immerman 2003-05-14 ch 1, | abuseEww... love. Kidding. ^_^ This was beautiful. I loved it. |
| Val Mora 2003-05-08 ch 1, | abuseOh, my. This is very good - I love it muchly. ^_^ It's clever. There were a couple of spelling mistakes - "vein" should be "vain" if it means futile; vein is something in your body that carries blood. Vain also means self-centered. Hmm. . . in the last verse of [7], you misspelled "meant" as "meat", which is actually quite amusing if you read it literally. That gotten out of the way, I really enjoyed this, and the story it tells - 'tis very cool. ^_^ Have you, by any chance, read Neil Gaiman and Terry Pratchett's "Good Omens"? It's about an angel and a demon who are trying to avert the Apocalypse, and there's rampant slash vibes throughout the whole thing. This kind of reminds me of that. However, this poem is good on its own - lovely work! |
| Erotic Antibiotic 2003-04-21 ch 1, | abusewow...i love it. Please continue to write...amazing. |
| Vivian Bennett 2003-03-22 ch 1, | abuseThe devil saying, "I hadn't lied." The Devil not lie - LOL! That is quite a concept! I really liked this - how romantic! ;-) |
| Kyn 2003-03-20 ch 1, | abuseOOh, it's a story poem ^_^ very well-written, I wish I could write as well as you. -bitter reminiscence |
| not sure yet 2003-03-19 ch 1, | abusesappy but cute and well written, nicely done |
| Sworn Destiny 2003-03-19 ch 1, | abuseI really liked this poem. I found it very describing, very deep. Good work. |