Once again, I'm really impressed with your writing. There are a few typos and such in there, so I'd suggest re-reading it, and spell-checking it again. Content-wise, though, it's awesome! I really liked Chapter 4, with the "historical" hints it gave. I like the interactions between Maru and Fylen, also. :)
A correction on Chapter 5: "thanks to the paraphernalia that the Republic had spread..." I think you mean "propaganda" instead of "paraphenalia" here.
Well, that's all for now! Thanks and keep writing!

This is awesome! Well-writen and very enticing! Since it's a critique, though, I've got a few suggestions/questions...
Chapter One: I'd suggest rewriting this section as: "Instead of the soft pale skin that was normally there, charred and destroyed flesh that pealed back away from the muscle could be seen."
Chapter Two: Take a look through the second paragraph. There are a few typos there. Also, if the Parliament building is under attack, why would the Parliament be meeting there? Wouldn't they meet outside the city, or at least in a safer place? Later on: "I think part of this whole thing I to get him." What do you mean?
Oh... Keep writing! I can't wait to hear what happens! And what the full history of Dakar is! How old is he now, anyways? 15? Or was that BEFORE?