Em back. ^_^ You've already updated 4 chapters (i guess) since i had gone. Read those 4 chapters straight one day. Ahihi. You're getting better and better with words. Ü I just wonder when you'll update again.. ^_^ It was last updated last year.
BTW: want to try and read my new fic? just go to my profile and You'll just see it there... Of Tales and Legends... though it may look too typical in the beginning like other stories or animes out there... Anyway, update your latest fic. A new one or an update of this one.

Well, this chapter is very interesting! Some secrets revealed, some secrets unanswered. You're still a bit erratic and confusing sometimes, but you also still write very well and still have a very interesting story! I'd love to see where you go from here.
~ Draic

This chapter was also very good. The only criticism I have at the moment is that it's very obvious that you're making up most of the story as you go along. Setoru had no plans to refuse Naora as his bodyguard before this chapter, and the flashback with Juna was very unexpected. Other than that, this story is still very interesting!!

This chapter was very good! You write very well, and with great imagery. You pushed the plot along a bit further, and Ume's explanation of why the guards think Naora tried to kill Setoru is very interesting. Excellent!

Lol. I didn't actually notice in the second chapter when Setoru saw Tobachi moving even though he was blind… but now you wrote that he saw the guards moving around after Naora escaped! Oh, and in your questions at the end of the chapter, you said 'Does Setoru have magic?' but you didn't say anything in the chapter that made me think Setoru had magic. It spoils the surprise a bit. Or maybe you meant 'Are Setoru's guards using magic on Naora?' That would have made sense. And wasn't Setoru's mother very ill six years ago?
I think it was an interesting surprise that the guards put Naora in prison - I didn't expect that - very good! Also good that Tobachi invites Naora to join his side - it shows that he is smart.
Oh, and one last thing… I don't think you should put (F) in the story. It's very distracting. If you don't want to write it, don't let the characters say it. You could write the word properly, because it's a CHARACTER saying it, not you! Or you could make up a swear word for them to say instead. There's one book I read where the characters say "d'avrit!" when they want to swear, and in another book they say "fenfen". It should be easy to make something up!
I hope I'm helping.
~Draic

I've realised… there's something strangely unrealistic about your work. I think that's what confused me. You seem to write so well, but your ideas don't seem well thought-out. If the prince has nearly had his head cut off, I don't think he's in any condition to be pointing swords at other people. And as good as the girl (Naora, I assume)… As good as she is, it shouldn't take one swing of her sword for each of the men who have just defeated the Black Eight, who have remained undefeated for five years. If the Black Eight are very good, and the killers are better than the Black Eight, then the killers should still put up a bit of a fight. You can write it so that the girl wins the fight easily but the killers still put up a bit of a fight. Basically, one swing each is too much to believe. And I'm also wondering how Setoru learned how to fight while he was blind… it sounds very intriguing. And also… if Setoru never lost a fight, how did he learn what to do? If he had a trainer or a teacher, the teacher would have to be better than Setoru and Setoru would lose the practise fights a lot until he got better at fighting. I'm sorry to sound so mean, because you really do write very well. Just think a bit more about what you are writing.
~ Draic

Okay, here's one thing I find strange - the blending of modern language with medieval. It's nothing bad, it's just unusual.

Strange… you write very well, and yet it seems wrong somehow… style? Hmm… I don't know… I'll get back to you.

^.^ Yo! Been a bit eh? Excellent work I must say, excellent indeed! I love Ryusaki's personality, and Naora is too much. ^.^ Ah, and now Bakin is with Tobachi! -.- Evil that you are. Please continue!! It's really good!! Note: You don't really describe what Naora looks like... so... what does she look like? or maybe I missed the description... hm...

So finally updated, huh? I've been waiting forever!! Well, this chapter was a bit short, but well-done as always:) Just one question: WHY DID YOU CHANGE THE TITLE!?

Oh yeah, I've got a new story posted:) It's a magical girl parody called StarSpangled Fighter Nicole!! Would you mind checking it out for me? Please?? And by the way, thanks for the cookie~!

~Tangerine Tickle~

Wah!! You changed the title! *gets all dramatic* I'm happy to see that it's been updated. I'm afraid I haven't gotten a chance to read this chapter yet, though. But when I do read it, I'll review again. *wishes she had the time now* But, I guess I should get my disheartened self going to attempt to finish a new chapter in Wanderers of Gaia, since Haiiro no Tenshi has recently been given a fourth chapter...
Disheartened? Why?
Perhaps the lack of new reviews for the past three months or so?
It's been that long?
Yes, it has.
-_-; Thanks a lot, guys. You just rubbed it in my face.
Uh, sorry?
*shakes her head* Well, anyway, I'll read and re-review this chapter as soon as I can.
Oyasuminasai!
Kai-chan

Aw, I kinda miss Setoru!! The blind sexist, idiotic pig that he is ^_^. It's SOO horrible of me not to have read earlier - ~_~!! Sorry about that! Glad to hear that you're back from a temporary writer's block!! Ahh, I don't like this Atasuke Ryusaki guy, but I'm thinking he'll grow on me! ^_^. I thought it was creepy when he grabbed her arm and made that comment O_O

“Let me go? Then maybe you can help me. These past 6 years, I myself have been trying to let you go, and it’s not very easy…”

But then again, he wasn't violent in any way ^_^. I like how you scattered a sentence FULL of imagery in the midst of the chapter - it is definitely a nice added effect! I hope Naora can escape the sekres! =\! They sound scary!

YEAH! Why isn't Setoru in this chap?^^ Wehehe...Hope you post again soon!

A beautiful update, very vague and foreboding both of past and future. Good fun. Do try and update sooner (though I realize I'm not one to talk! Heh.), because you have left us (once again) with a cliffhanger. Clever of you, perhaps, but annoying too! ^_^

Flamehail.

A beautiful update, very vague and foreboding both of past and future. Good fun. Do try and update sooner (though I realize I'm not one to talk! Heh.), because you have left us (once again) with a cliffhanger. Clever of you, perhaps, but annoying too! ^_^

Flamehail.