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Jitterrue 2003-07-08 . chapter 1
Cool. It reminds me of a note from one person to another. How about just plain, "Dear Love, how you spite me"
I dunno. haha. don't listen to me. haha.
Damaged 2003-04-25 . chapter 1
I can relate to this. I used to go through the line "But there is just this one thing, you see/While I am away, you have a terrible knoack/Of whispering behind my back" This is beautifully written. Keep up the great writing!
Carter Tachikawa 2003-04-13 . chapter 1
A very nice poem. I love your rhyme scheme. It would be nice if you could split it into stanzas but overall it's very good:) Keep writing.

~CT
Lady of Stars 2003-03-29 . chapter 1
Very neat poem. Love the word useage!
obsidian katana 2003-03-28 . chapter 1
great poem! yeah, people like that can really break your heart. nice work! kee it up!
Minerva 2003-03-28 . chapter 1
Nice. :)
Needa S 2003-03-28 . chapter 1
Very meaningful! Farewell would make a great title. Awesome job! Keep writing...
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