I really liked this, it was almost symbolic.

You describe it as the pursuit of death. It could also be the pursuit of someone you loved, yes? Get what I'm saying?

Hmm. I liked the word choice, although I feel that you could have substituted certain words with other, more...colorful ones. Like laughed, smiled... Maybe replaced them with more complex ones.

I like the idea, though. It sesms intriguing. Good work.

-RM love, link on my page.

This is amazing. Simple sentences never moved me so much.

I hate death. Oddly enough, I read the poem. Wowzers.
Regina O.B.

powerful. exciting. i like it - on my fav list.

Cool very cool... I like your more suttle poems...They're good because you can get so detailed and paint a picture in someone's mind ,yet sometimes less is more...

Such persistent pursuer!

A VERY WELL Written Poem. Almost like a Nightmare how he/she worded it.

wow. beauty in simplicity...

so cool! I love it! If you want you can check out mine.