Great choice of words.. Its a good piece.. Rather sad theme but all the same I liked it.. The poem flows well and the theme is quite thorougly explored.. Keep writtin.. =)

^__^ this must be your best poem yet, at least in my perspective... i'm time-restricted so this wouldn't be like my usual reviews... love the rhymes! ^__^ go take another shower, maybe you'll post up a new poem again... perhaps you can write one in which everyone escapes from school... won't that be worth it? ^__^ anyway, that's all for now, until next time, keep up the excellent work... ^__^ by the way, i looked at your reviews for gundam wing story and you haven't updated for quite a while; i haven't started to read it yet, but i recommend you update soon so all those anxious readers can enjoy the new chapter... anyways, i am subject to my own opinions so you don't have to listen to me, bye now. ^__^.

Ah, wonderful! Your beautiful use words is to be commended. I don't know why, but I like the verse "Human fate, so fickle and vain / Destiny's naught, but sorrow and pain"