YES! i have finally found out your name!

Juno, you blow me away with your originality in writing, you know. I admit, I had to read through this piece over and over again to get the gist. But I did understand much more as I read further down. You take the reader to a new universe. How about becoming a fantasy author? ~_^

It was very interesting how Ilandere was told not to look at the sun by her mother in the first paragrapg and by Ramses was told not to look at the moon. This similarity was really spooky. Quite a contrast in one way but it also sparks a similarity in another context. Ah, what is it with opposites?

Ilandere's personality sounds very stubborn and sensitive yet filled with some inner pride inside ^_^;; Unless that isn't her intended characteristic then I do apologise for misinterpreting through reading this short story. I think when Ramses called her a peasant then it hit me to realise that she doesn't like being put down for who she was and in the part where Ramses incorrectly called Kaia a sister rather than half-sister of Ilandere.

"Day loved its darker companion. But both were doomed, always to glimpse, though never to touch, to long, but not to have. The sun, so bright and pure, was blinding in its allure, and the moon, a lone, glowing shard amidst the darkness, only alight because of the sun's radiance.
For, as was its wont in life, the moon would always need the sun, but never be needed in return."

I truly admired the fine details that were given to end this story. You make the fact of longing so realistic when you wrote about the sun and the moon. By using these two subjects in personifaction, it made me, as the reader so convinced that they were like ordinary people who desperately longed for each other. You should be doing a writing degree :D I really suck these days, even for a student who is doing a Writing degree. As a fellow amateur author, I think you should enter this story into a writing competition.