sounds cool man!

pretty cool

Hello ti's me gain!!1 i luv ur story and OMG it's gonna b so long! gl writting it all k. ttyl well evn i already am now lol kk bby!!

These two chapters are a good start, though I am rather surprised by the way you chose to end this chapter. Structurally, it feels like bare bones in need of some fleshing out -- in some places you jump ahead quite quickly. Your writing is decent but can be cleaned up by eliminating some spelling errors (homophones especially), and by fixing up punctuation and run-on sentences. Do you know where the rest of this is going?

Me likes. Me likes much.

I LUV THSI STORY! IZ SO KAWAII! u hav to continu it's so cute how aewyn and Talen are close, keep writting!

lol Talen get's overwhelmed with work. i like it ! it's got into the flow and it's leading somewhere. All you need to do now is to continue it into the council within a chapter or two if u wish to make it longer. B-sides it's very good and i think u should definetley continue.

But neways, i got ANOTYHER competition ARGH!!1 i'll phoen u some time k. keep going and type 4 da sky! lol

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