well it was a pretty good story. good use of words, only very minor grammatical errors and very infrequent so they weren't annoying enough to stop reading. it was an interesting read, i was actually quite confused i mean you start so fast and you just never slow down to explain things but the story is hardly finished so that is no big deal anyways. keep writing i'm interested to see where this is going.

GO ME!
sUPER CHUETTE!
go on and read it
I hope to produce a chapter a week
well for those of you reading my imput go on give it a try! ^__^