Oh, you're right - creepy but cool. I enjoyed the way you broke up the lines and wrote it as more of a thought process and what went through the narrator's mind. Wonderfully done.

very interesting...lol kinda weird, but i really like it(weird isnt bad ;)) lol keep writing!

Really vivid. I love the ending.

Miamouse, hey, I thought this was a really good poem. And I got the impression that you have an eating disorder. Although, that may not be the case (I have one myself) I guess I'm pretty out of it, not eating is the cause. Anyways, if you ever want to talk about anything then you can just email me at .