I liked it. I think you established your characters very well and had a good amount of description. No ideas. Please write more. I think this is great!

~ME!~

I think this is a very good start. The dialogue is smooth and you've given the characters solid foundations on which you can build on in later chapters. Please continue, this is going somewhere good! :-)

I think you should definitely continue this! I like the description of Adelain, basically the imagery throughout is very strong and is written nicely. In the middle though there are some parts that need to be broken up because the dialogue runs together making it a bit confusing. But I do like the whole alluding to the coming of something evil. Hope to see more!

Well, i have to say its a very interesting story so far, but i need more! Keep it up =)