Oh... great begginig chapter sis. I love that. now if you could truly bring out the essence of the story of yours in the forth coming ones. pity i have little time for my own but well.. use of english is good and character wise no prob. keep on !

Great job! Never thought you'd see me here huh? Carry on, it's terrefic( oops, my spelling)! Nice use of vocabulary! But try to make the paragrapghs more linked, then it'll sound even nicer.

I love this story so far! It is so good! I can't wait to read the next chappie! I am sorry, I can't think of a good name... I did think of one though, but it probably isn't what your looking for- What Lies Ahead

Too scary? I don't have any other ideas. :( Sorry. I hope you find a name soon though! Good luck!

Heck,I'm starting to get .

Well done!(Especially the fact that I've got a general for a .The closest my dad can get is a captain-he used to be in the army,yarhz.)Sigh. Put in a few bishies!_

Sigh.

Both you ad Shana have interesting stories. Me? I have 20-over reviews submitted. :( :(

Oh yah.

**Continue soon!*