 Windsong 2005-05-08 . chapter 1Oh, come on, you know I *had* to review this one just because of its name. *chuckles* Well, anyways. Really beautiful poem. The word choice is precise and very good, and you capture that feeling of tenderness very, very well. However, the rhythm seems to start and stop; sometimes you have it, often you don't and the rhythm just goes all over the place. You also rhyme in the first and third stanzas but don't anywhere else, which throws me off just a bit (but this isn't that bad, really, so eh.) The second stanza also seems a bit confusing to me (although this may just be because it's two AM and I'm exhausted. ;^^). It's not incomprehensible, it just takes a moment of thought.
Despite my random criticisms, I really enjoyed this poem. The love you and your husband share is beautiful, and I'm very happy for both of you. Odd side note that I feel I *have* to ask, though: why did you name this poem "Wind Song?"
Keep writing! -Windsong |