This started out great. I loved all the imagery. Um, the only thing I suggest is that when you are telling about a new race in your sotry; don't say let me tell you about them. It sounds odd. Other than that I like this. I hope you update soon. If you could e-mail me when you update I'll gladly read and review again, otherwise I can't guarantee that I'll see it. Either way, good work.
~Kat

I'm after you, Lord. (your story is a repeat)
-Slayer of Lords