 wordsworth in a garbage can 2004-06-12 . chapter 1You seem like a cool person. I'm sorry- I hope things get better for you.
Your poem is pretty good- I read some of your other works and everything's so beautifully written, it's great. |
 Society's Cavity 2004-04-12 . chapter 1Very few poems can pull off this much repetition, but I love this! Even with the lack of variation, the point is conveyed very strongly. All in all, I just plain love this poem. |
 v33 2003-06-30 . chapter 1DAMN! that was good! and i dont think i'm exaggerating! Your a truely gifted writer! Love your poems, keep up that good skill of yours! ;) |
 greenfroggies 2003-06-18 . chapter 1WOW! Brilliant! Luv it all and it has emotion and simplicity. One line (amd this is just me trying to find a problem in an almost perfect poem!) you could improve is 'Without any goal' I think it would sound better as 'without a goal'. :-b |
 hoellenwauwau 2003-04-10 . chapter 1great one, very interesting. and very emotional.
cio, hoellenwauwau |
 Miamouse 2003-04-10 . chapter 1interesting. seems to get a bit repetitive near the end, even though I know you meant it to.
Good overall.
Mia :) |