WOW!
Had I not known any better, I'd say this was a love song.
Its really sweet the way he was there for her. You make good mushy poetry.

aww...poor guy na? so close yet so far. so close yet not his. ^^

AH! I wish I could hear its music...your song is a lot better than the ones I hear on the radio (whenever I hear some of those corn I'd rather put on earplugs) ^_^ Keep it up!

ahh!! sugoi sue-chan!! more!! btw, do u have the music composition for it? >.<

MiNt* =)

Whow! Sounds like this guy's a replacement for the girl (or guy if you're writing for yaoish purposes -snicker, poke- No matter... he's sweet.