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| Linnet 2004-06-14 ch 1,  | abuseHey, Alli, this is Pineapple Queen from TIP...I followed a link in your signature, I believe. This is very touching. My favorite line would have to be: "But a dark alley in a dirty city had taken away his love." A very creative way to describe it...it really adds to the impact. -Linnet |
| Emma 2004-05-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseHey Alli! :) Just discovered your FictionPress profile and am now determined to review all your stories. :D I liked the way that you shaped this short piece, starting with descriptions of the woman, then the tune, then the situation she was in. She let the voice of her heart speak to her fingers. Her fingers gave life to her feelings; the piano laid them bare for all to see. That has to be my favourite sentence. The image of feeling alone in a crowd is also very powerful. :) |
| Kaleidoscopic 2003-07-12 ch 1, | abuseDammit, Alli, why didn't I review before? I *meant* to, but this rendered me incoherent. The review box would have full of '\aslk\l;sk\l;k' and such. Anyway, I love this. It's short, but in that space of time you tug at my heart then use it for a Bludger substitute. "She let the voice of her heart speak to her fingers. Her fingers gave life to her feelings; the piano laid them bare for all to see." I adore that paragraph. It's such a raw and beautiful mental image. (Undertoned is one word, by the way, I think.) Just a beautiful story. And you are *so* on my Favourite Authors list now. ;) ~Jyri |
| Jesabelle 2003-07-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseHey Alli, it's Char from UR.net and SQ :) I read about your original works in your Wizard Portrait at the Quill. This was really good, you writing is really mature and poignent. I love the detail you put into it, it's really haunting and sad. Great work! |
| Blanche Neige 2003-06-13 ch 1, | abuseSince you reviewed both of my stories, I feel obligated to do the same for you... Not that going through and reading them is painful at all. Your stories are beautiful. This one is so simple and wonderfully written. It's so easy to fall into the minds of your characters and feel what they are feeling, when you only use a few words to tell what they are thinking. You're an amzaing writer. ~*Meg |
| Heather Montgomery 2003-04-12 ch 1, | abuseIt's short, but beautiful all the same. The idea of emotion showing so strongly through a song hits home for me. It's a very nice piece. Good job! |