Beautiful. I agree as well, we do need peace.

-Britt

This is hard comment on. Every being is different and I don't always know what their thinking. That is why I love reading, to get that insight. I'm neive and in ways ignorant to the reality of war. I'm conflicted.

i find it hard that a christian should talk of peace but everyone has their saving grace this is a great poem little do they know we're all victims. Nat

its awesome! Everything was perfect, except the soldier part, that I'm sure you kinda 'corrected' it in your other poem.. You really got talent, spread it! D

M... very touching.

Let's hope for the best, shall we?

Kaede

OH MY GOD! HILARIOUS! This is the funniest story ever! Im about to vomit! The funniet part was the part with the Grandma and the pop tart quilt! AHZAH

Wow, that was really beautiful. It really touches the soul.

very emotional. A wonderful piece of work :)

N'ISil

Aside from your depiction of the soldier, this was, I think, a very well written poem on war. I enjoyed reading it immensely. There's so much talent here...

I can almost see talent Emanating from you in an aura. You are a great talent in writing, you can effective step in the shoes of the many characters you describe. But I'm afraid, while we could describe most of them, like us all, we have flaws of not understanding things completely. Well, I have to say that the only flaw you had is the aspect of describing the soldier. Tough like the harderned steel, it is brittle in cold water - main reason why liberty ships sunk in WWII, and probably why the Titanic sank, oh well, back to the topic...

Three things about Soldiers:

Soldiers Cry,

Soldiers Pray,

Soldiers Don't want to fight.

Wars hurt everybody, that's what I have to say... I guess...

...and Keep writing! I'm looking forward to read more of your writings, for they are all very heartfelt and skillfully written. :o)

DW

Wow a lovly poem...really beautiful.

Very moving. Loved it very much.

So much said, in such stark simplicity.

The images are right there, in front of me, in her words; I love the "thin shift, sticky to her skin", and "it is a hawk,(clever!) not a dove". If this author is the "future"-then there is hope for her visions...and all human beings, white, yellow, black ,or those with "cinnamon skin"!

The only critique i would offer would be that of the image of the soldier: he is too one-sided. He KNOWS the FULL cost-sees the faces-lives with them in his mind forever,if he makes it home to do so. He suffers too-and prays; he is human, and most likely not too much older than this small child. Not HIS choice to go to war- all soldiers will tell you that they, too, prefer "peace".

A great deal of talent is evident here in Les Yeux Violets...i hope she develops it further in her future, and continues to gift us with her poetry.