Wow. This is incredibly well written and I'm completely caught up in it. It gets a little pedantic in patches but is really, really good! Have you considered publishing it?

Quite interesting.

I was wondering why Ocea spoke in lowercase, but figured it was a stylistic element. Overall I enjoyed reading the dialogue, especially the slang-y kids' in chapter three.

Ch 1 started out confusingly, but I sorted the story out. I think. More description would have helped.

Your bio made me laugh. Good luck achieving perfection, et bonne santé.

Great! I feel sorry for poor Triol. He's had a lot of surprises since he met Ocea. I know he doesn't regret it, though. Keep goin'! Nice story!