ITS SUCKS!

just kidden. Its pretty good.

gj

The writing is very mystical and poetic and I think that the lack of dialogue is a strength, rather than a weakness. A very intriguing story!

looks like you're off to a good start! Good imagery in the first chapter, nice descriptions throughout and interesting overall. Is this story beginning in medias res or is it just starting like this?? You have good vocabulary too, but maybe a bit more dialogue? Hope you decide to continue this! =]

Steph

wow.. good story.. it's so rich of imagery! lol, if only it was a littlel onger... u also need a bit more dialogue, but the imagery really covers up for it @_@... so good... and u have SAT words in there (learning 24/7). well, update soon k!

Another interesting one from you! I'm looking forward for this to be continued. Both the characters portrayed wonderfully. Do I detect a sense of sensulity there? I finally realized what I love so much about your writing and what makes it so different from Geoff's. You have barely any dialogue so when there are quotes, its very powerful since very little is said.
Well until next post!
^^ Expect something from me k?(lolz i'm not saying it'll be anything that can measure to your work. I'm sticking with poetry.)
-Cindy Moon *)

very good.. full of description.. i'm telling you.. new york times bestseller