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| LiNdSaY.AP 2003-12-31 ch 10,  | abusewhat happened to sebastian? did he just . . . die? you have a great plot/story/everything here, but you might want to describe things in some more detail . . . it all just goes by too fast. |
| TheSpy 2003-07-14 ch 7, | abuseI have to say that this was a very good idea, and that you seemed to have a grasp of what you wanted, but to me it seemed a littler to corny and predictable. |
| NthNinth 2003-06-30 ch 16, | abuseit is a great chapter, but it sounds a bit weird to have him trying to impress melanie as a fault :) |
| Shi Maxwell 2003-06-21 ch 13, | abuseInteresting^-^ You could use a bit more detail but I like it. |
| Dark Angelice 2003-06-14 ch 12, | abusei love the way you write - i cant wait for the next chappie - whos this new guy that taps melanie? |
| NthNinth 2003-06-14 ch 12, | abuseaw, a short chapter :( Its still good though! :) update soon |
| NthNinth 2003-06-05 ch 10, | abusevery good, but everything happens so quickly! |
| Dark Angelice 2003-05-23 ch 9, | abuseaw... so cute - cant wait til the next chapter to see what happenes next! |
| Xelena 2003-05-05 ch 8, | abusei really like this story- continue, onegai.. |
| Xelena 2003-04-27 ch 6, | abusei really liked this chapter although it could have been a bit longer. anyways, please continue |
| Xelena 2003-04-22 ch 5, | abusei like it, it's very easy to read which makes it thoroughly enjoying. however, there is one thing- it's kinda confusing at points- so if you could just try to write a little more clearly then it'd be excellent. |
| Hayley 2003-04-22 ch 5, anon. | abuseWow! You are such a good updater! The story is getting better and better! I love vampires! |
| Mountain Peak 2003-04-22 ch 5, anon. | abuseGreat story! The only constructive critizism that I can possibly think of is to lengthen your chapters, escpecially chapthers 2+3 (I think) Please add on as son as you can Can't wait to read the rest! |
| Hayley 2003-04-20 ch 3, anon. | abuseGood chapter, it's a good continuation of the first one. But did you know that you posted the second chapter twice, and that the third one is missing? Maybe you should look into that. |
| Xelena 2003-04-18 ch 1, | abusei liek the beginning though it's a little on the short side. please continue |