i like the concept of a sleep walking lil' girl, always great for a mystery setting. and the greenies? anonymous baddies are always a plus.

the spelling was bad tho, so minuses for that :P

story 7/10
spelling 4/10
how much more i wanna read?/ all of it

I like this, very very cool.

Anywho, you reviewed my screenplay. The reason its so short is cause it was an assignment for English class, and in actuallity it's too long, they were supposed to be about 8 pages, and printed out this is like 12 pages...I have trouble developing simple plots so I had to compress everything, thanks though.

Keep writing, I'll be looking for your stuff