I really like this first chapter. It's very descriptive so far, and very mysterious.

Good.

Don't be mad @ me or take this the wrong way but your story sorta reminds me of Star Wars. Bounty hunter I mean. Also I've noticed your stories are set around bars, cool. You signed my story and I came to say thanx for the vote. I'll let you know when I begin it if you want. Also, your profile says you read HP fanfiction. Well I write it. My name is PhoenixTears13 and the story is called The Neutral Child. Just in case. Em

Great story!I can't wait to see what happens next! Write more now! I mean...
umm...umm...PLEASE!

Great chappy! LOL. He fliped off his own ship?! That must have been a shocker. Well I can't wait to see what you write next!

Great story! I can't wait to see what you write next! Don't keep me in suspence to long!

I like, I like, but...shouldn't this be in the star wars fanfiction category? It seems original enough, but the idea to use Mandalorian body armor will be enough to tip off most casual Star Wars fans.

I really like where this is going, although to be honest, I've got no idea where it'll go. But the descriptions are nice so far of Arawyn. One piece of advice - her clothes shouldn't be so important. Use the text to give the reader more clues to her personality, besides the fact that she's just a ruthless bounty hunter. If she remains this way for the rest of the story, with few or no vulnerabilities, weaknesses or flaws, Arawyn will become uninteresting, and the story along with it.

Just my two cents. email me if you got questions.