YUM CHOCOLATE!! it seriously takes away any frown.. even if it's just for a little while, i truley believe that, GOOD JOB!! *craves for chocolate now*

lol. I love chocolate. But I have a friend who hates it! Weird, eh?

Anyway, you should say "just what any girl needs", because if you say "so much better than weed", it sounds like you just put in any word that rhymes with seed. But what do i know, right:) lol. Good poem though...Hm I'm getting a little hungry.

~*JaMeZ*~

Hm...I'm going to say Just what any girl needs, because it seems to fit.
The heck with diamonds...chocolate is a girl's best friend!
:-P Good poem...chocolate is definately the best comfort food.
~*SableTrumpetress

That's a nice poem. I like the way you pulled off the rhyme. So many times, poems end up with a forced rhyme sceame simply because they noticed two of the lines rhymed and decided to continue it.
My favorite lines: "She slows the inner war/ peace is near"
Keep it up!
-A+B

CHocolate! lol I like it. Nice rhythm. Good job.

"Just what any girl needs". Writing in itself is already so much better than weed. I'll be back.

Haha, very clever! The rhymes make it have a cool rhythm to it. Great job!!
-Erica-
P.S. It's cool to see another Evanescence fan, I love them!

Yes, chocolate is the seed of a fruit (or some kind of plant, anyway...), and as for line 10, I think it's good as it is, but if you wanted to change it, you could drop the quotes and pop in an exclamation point (I dunno...just a suggestion.)
Also, thank you for the review. Being new to the whole story-writing thing, it means the world to me when someone actually takes the time to write to me about my story. Thanx.

~Heidi Miller ;)

I think "just what a girl needs" is better because weed isn't mentioned at all in the poem thus it is just a random mentioning and that makes it sound funny. if you were comparing chocolare to weed then you could use the weed part. anyway, i like this poem. it is quite cute! i'm glad she got her chocolate too!! ^_^

True that! Let's hear it for chocolate covered almonds: Endorphine covered aphrodisiacs! ^_~

I like "better than weed" myself, but that's just me.

Keep up the good work!

T~H

Yummy...

M Chocolate . . . Good poem I think that "Just what a girl needs" fits better with this poem but thats just my opinion

great job!!

i think that ""Just what a girl needss" sounds better

ya, neways, good job!

i personally like the one about weed, and yes, it is a girls best friend...wonderful job

I love this poem, and any girl can relate to it! :)

I think "Just What Any Girl Needs" sounds better, BTW.

Grat job, and keep writing! :D

*Jessie*