Poor Angel. Did she kill him? If he wanted a better fight why didn't he let her trian to become stronger and then single her out? Then maybe sh'd have lived...

oh, lol, I read this already today, before I knew it wasa by you, and thought it was really good. hehe, shoulda known it was you by the writing style...some days I am just slow on the draw...very good, I really enjoyed reading it...kinda reminded me of something that amelia atwater rhodes might write, and I love her

update soon

M: Welcome back hellbabi!

H: Glad 2 B back.

M: Well? What ya think?

H: **sighs** I swear there are a lot of dark short 1 page stories U have.

M: **nods** go on

H: Well out of all the ones I have read you make them seem so real.Like this actually happen to someone and you got a hope to it and put it out there for us to read.

M: **nods excitedly** go on

H: Well **shruggs shoulders** What can I say. My imagination gets the best of me and there are a few things in the world i do believe in. **smiles evilly** Hmm I might let you read it and tell me what you think.

M: **gulps, narrows eyes at the smile Hellbabi gave her**

H: **laughs hysterically** take it easy, its based on what happen a while ago and its seems to follow me everywhere **sighs** its actually scary but enough about me back to this story i just read

I think its reader digest material. I read RD a lot. So I know whats hot and whats not..My predictions are always on the money about the ARTS (mainly music and writing)

M: Well I think that cover it folks this is Melissaarxy1 saying "Love, Peace, & Chicken Grease"

H: U jsut gon end like that

M: Who show id this?

H: Yours but..

M: Then who asked for you 2 cents **walks of stage whistling**

H: **muttering to herself** Writers can't live w/ them damn sho' can't live w/o them **sighs**

LOL!

*shivers with a chill* good story, on the scary and cold side but very good. True blue 'evil' vampire you made there, same for the 'hunter'

I LOVE how you end these stories!! But i doubt I can do that i usually make it where someone else is telling the story and you are looking in but i think i might try to use the 'I' and 'We' thing..and i said give it a TRY!! Well i loved it just like your other ones but I love you Our Story series the best!! (I dont think you could have told by my review...lol) Well write more stories soon!! ^_^
~Static Wolf

This story could be way longer. If you wanted it to be rushed and cut off in places, you did a good job. Angel seemed to go from point A to point B with absolutely no problems. That makes for disbelief in character. Showing work, and struggle makes a reader feel akin to the character at hand. There were a few formatting problems, and at places the dialogue seemed typical and predictable.