well i know i've been wicked nice about everything... but i really like this.
french song is a bit much tho... might want to que 'why does it always rain on me' instead
the lover

Well, I'm just going to say it.

The best part of the story was the author's notes.

"saccharine words poured themselves out like too much syrup on pancakes"

Sounds to me like something one would say about those sickeningly sweet words so often said by an awkward wannabe lover.

What a fun sentence.

I loved it.

that was really well written. it was (or mabye it jsut made me) crazt go nuts!!

Hey! It isn't wierd at all, this is great. So it might be short, but it is certainly very good. The words you have used are good and I thought it was set out nicely. Good Job!
Laura! ~Cracked up cat~