I get it. At least i think i do. Reminds me of summer here and seamus, my friend of summers long ago. Beautiful.

wow. short but lovely...it really shows what a difference six months can make, both seasonally and personally. just..really lovely.

~EG

You make e want to crawl into a hole and die. Just give up on ever even attemtping to write.

This is so good.

Beautiful! I like the way you used the seasons and similarities between the two stanzas.. Two thumbs up.

Great job

I love the subtle shifts in each section...how the black dog goes from "she" to "he", how the difference is summed up in the closing line regarding the sandbar...it's all so melancholy, windy almost...I love it (as usual ^-^)

Wonderful job!! Why dontcha come share your talent with us at "Poets of today"
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Ah, I like this one. It feels a bit rough to me though (I'm not sure why) but I think it's very good regardless. (I especially like the changing months and then the different sandbar.)

Very quietly bittersweet, and yet I feel like the deeper meaning here isn't as strong as you're feeling it. The echoes between the first and second stanza are nicely done.

this was good and cute. in all honesty, it comes off as being a little vague at what the underlying meaning is behind it. but that's all good. Still it's good and i hope you keep on writing.
~Caving in is not something I do best...Kanya~