ShinjitsuNoHikari
2004-06-14
ch 1,  | abuseAww, I really was starting to get into this story and you haven't updated it since last year. ;_; It's a bit odd to get past the age thing--Christa is 4 by the time she's in a unit, and her language as well as other 'intelligence' skills are that of someone in their early teens. Aside from that, I generally like the story. It seems a bit lacking in some description though. You skip a few years, and although I do understand why you did that, it just seems that the story is rushed a little in that sense. Write more, I want to see what happens to Christa and her groupmates. |
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