hey, i like so far! keep going please, it looks like its going to be a really good story, judging from the first chapter :)!

brava! but, perhaps, a bit of editing is in order? the setting is well-conceived, the concept is a good one, and i'd be perfectly willing to lend a hand if it'd make your job easier. i'll LOVE seeing the story unfold either way! again, very good.

its iight so far

Come on girl more details! Please sweetie!

why are you not writing any more chapters?! I need to know more! this on my favorites list and everything!

Hey, this is pretty good! Weird how you used my pen-name, though! Guess that makes me a dresser, huh?

Marie-Adelaide aka Tabitha

Excellent beginning, I look forward to later chapters

very nice, I like this a lot, it's well written and intriguing. Can't wait for the next chapter.