Okay, well I am in a hurry and didn't get to finish your story, but I just wanted to write you a quick review and let you know that I love your writing style, you're doing a great job! Also, I noticed your comment "I don't know what the public likes." Honey, write for yourself. Write because you enjoy writing, not because you're trying to meet the standards of others. You're doing fine. :)

write more!

l0lz. i luv the how she dusnt noe y the guyz act all flustered around her, and she's amused by da way they act. itz so cute! yay!

Lovley story... I love it! I think that it's wonderful that Raine has wings. I like flying characters. She isn't the conventional character, is she?

Looks like you haven't updated this in a long time. ^^ Still good...Oh yah, btw, I'm amazed you played a Chopin Nocturne for 2 hours straight. Was it new to you or something? I can sight read ninth-grade in a second, tenth grade takes a bit more time, and ARCT takes a lot more time too. If you're wondering why I mentioned 9the and 10th grade, it's just that I still play them.

I like this story. If you keep up the good work, you'll end up on my favorite's list. Update, please.

I think that this will be an interesting chapter since women aren't allowed in the smithy. update soon i can't wait to see what happens!!

Well, the last chapter feels like what it is, incomplete. I know that the version safely deposited on your computer is more finished and much more satisfying (I'm pretty sure everybody who like the previous chapters will love it), and it still is not done, thus I can't offer a real opinion on it. So I won't say anything else about that.

What about the rest of the story? Well, I'm kind stuck on something to say, so I'll just start picking at stuff. You know I love the story. Actually, the laundry-list is kind long. I'll send it to you. But I, like everybody else, can't wait to see what else comes out of your "twisted mind".

i like where this is going! you introduced ppl the right way, you know not long paragraphs about each of them which i like a lot! i dont think "a day at the smithy" was too detailed and dont cut out anything, update me when u write more!

Alright, I didn't have time to read the other four chapters, but I did read the first one. It is a good plot and I love how you have it in the present tense, not past like most. The only thing I picked up on is the word "whips" you use it a couple times in the first two paragraphs. You explained their emotions magnificently, and you are very good at describing things. The only thing I would suggest is to sometimes use different words in different paragraphs, just to get more contrast. Other then that the beginning from what I read was an awesome start and I am sure the next four paragraphs will be awesome. Hope the tiny bit of constructive critism I gave helps, and hopefully it didn't seem mean. LoL. As to your question, it takes me about an hour to an hour and a half to write a chapter for my stories. So not long at all. Thanks for your review! I'll be back to check up on it later!

really like your story. nice really nice. nice writing style also.
P.S. if u have the time R&R my story

Very nicely written; I eagerly await the next chapter. Oh, and best of luck with writing a book. I bet you'd hit best-sellers w/o much trouble at all. = )

good storie! I like it tons! r/r mine if you have time!

This is great! You must finish the chapter!

aww poor Raine... she's lucky to have such a sweet brother. I see you fixed the spacing, very nicely done