0.0 Whoa... Too something 4 words... The reason I said 'something' is 'cause I don't know the right word 4 it...

Powerful words - you seem to use poetry as a means of letting off steam/sorting through thoughts and I can't think of a better use for it! Found a typo here: "The could shoulder" 'could' shoudl be 'cold'. Anyway, no big criticisms ;) Keep writing!