Reviews for Collector's Folly

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Ronin Rabbit 2006-12-28 ch 15,	NOTE: I've removed chapter one (my author's note, per the updated TOS) but unfortunately it did not push back all the reviews given thus far. So everything up to this point is actually referring to one chapter back, ex: a review for chapter 15 is referring to chapter 14.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 15,	CREEPY! But very, very good. Powerful. Enigmatic. My favorite haiku of yours. And now I conclude my critiques of your series of poems. I know I've left some criticism, but I know you aren't one of the many of people on here that can't handle anything other than garish praise. I hope you find it all helpful, and I've added you to my favorite author's list. I look forward to reading much more of your work. I really think you're a brilliant poet, and I see you've written fiction too. I look forward to seeing what that's like. =D
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 14,	I've told you in a previous review that I love your use of repetition. That still stands. =D
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 13,	Symbolic. I like symbolism. Perhaps the symbolism is a bit -too- obvious. But then, with haikus, it's difficult, since there isn't a whole lot of room and it needs to be a bit more blunt. For it's purpose, it serves well, and is quite a change from the previous poems I've reviewed, as it isn't quite as enigmatic.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 12,	Something seems to be missing, but I can't quite tell what it is. Direction, maybe? That doesn't sound quite right, but I can't think of a better word. Of course, sometimes that's better, if it's meant to be that way stylistically. It could be better with some revision, I think, but all the same, it's a lot better than most poetry I see on fp.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 11,	I admit, I was afraid when I saw the title. I've seen way too many poems called prism that were cheesy, uncreative drivel. But this is the best poem I've ever read on fictionpress.com. In fact, better than a lot of poems I've read from classic and modern published poets. I LOVE it. I'm printing it off right now, in fact, because that's just what I do when I like stuff. It's the next best thing to having it in a book.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 10,	I love love love love love the use of repetition. My reviews are going to start getting shorter (whether that's a good or bad thing, you decide), as I'm now on a bit of a time crunch. I love this one. Love.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 9,	Would you be offended if I said this, on first impression, sort of reminds me of David Bowie? I'm not sure how you feel about him, but I like Bowie, so I mean it in a good way. Of course, the more I read the less it seemed Bowie-esque, and your own individuality came out stronger. The whole poem seemed to crescendo into an orgasmic last line (heh, I've always wanted to say that). That last line really packs a punch. I really, really like this one.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 8,	Now this is an original concept. I admi, it took me a minute to figure it out, and then I noticed the title (I'm a genius sometimes), and it all clicked. So I reread it again, just to be sure. The only part I;m not so sure I like is this part: Tongues like cats,They assail me like bats. Again, my fickleness with rhymes. =P
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 7,	Beautiful. I know on your other poems I posted somewhat long-winded reviews, but on this one, I think that will suffice. Because this is one of my favorites.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 6,	353s used to actually be pretty popular. I think people are turned off from writing them because it's so hard to fit meaning or substance into eleven syllables. Yours, on the other hand, really impacted me. There are so many things I think you could possibly mean in this one poem, but more than likely none of them are what you had in mind. And, to be honest, that's what I think separates good poetry from poetry that makes people famous.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 5,	This isn't my favorite of yours (out of those that I've read), and I'll be honest why. I think it seems a little forced. Maybe it's just my usual aversion to short lines that rhyme. I'm biased that way, I admit it. I do really like this part though: A senior criesThe three-legged beastStumbles and dies. That part doesn't seem forced at all, and thus makes it much more powerful. I really, really, like that part.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 4,	I like the new version better. It has a nice ring to it. Actually, it kind of reminds me of those rhymes you'd chant as a kid when doing patty-cake or hopskotch. Those old rhymes always tended to have a darker side to them anyway (heck, look at Ring Around the Rosie). I like this one a lot, even though I don't normally like minimalistic poetry. I think your good choice of words and feeling are what made it a good piece.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 3,	I like that this poem is called "Lyrika Nonsensika." For some reason, it sounds very Lewis Carrol-esque. And I like that. Stylistically, i can't say anything against it, because when something is labeled as "nonsense," technically nothing can be wrong with it. But! I do have two things I'd like to bring up anyway. First, were the "lendme" and "takeme" conjunctions intentional? At first I thought it was a mistake, but upon rereading, it doesn't seem to be so. Secondly, given this part:Bounce to itPounce to itLife’s a big cat. Swerving and unnerving,The eyes speak none. I think the last line kind of throws off the rhythm. Maybe an extra syllable? But like I said earlier, it all depends on the style or feel you're going for. Sometimes a little "dissonance" in a poem is more effective.
KirstenE 2005-06-10 ch 2,	I'll be honest - when I first started reading this one, I was really skeptical. I'm not a fan of poems that look like they try too hard to rhyme. But then I read more, and understood the style. I like how you constantly change up the rhyme scheme and the meter, thus assisting the overall feel of choppiness, which sometimes is a bad thing, but given the nature of the poem itself and it's topic, it lends itself well.

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