Heh, I thought that was pretty awesome... I like what you put the sap through...(He deserved it and all)>=D

Girl power!

It's like that old saying: hell hath no fury like a woman scorned.

That was VERY interesting and well-deserved. He got what was coming to him. And here I thought he had only cheated on her with one woman, but Vantessa named off three! --Okay, one was one too many. And I like her name: not "Vanessa," but "VANTESSA." Gives you a new feeling to it.

And even though this may sound sick, I think you should describe his agony more because it just seems like Vantessa is doing all this for revenge, but she doesn't get FULL revenge, because it's so short-lived. But I guess vengeance IS short-lived.

Scorned women . . . gotta becareful of them. But the scorners, gotta be even MORE careful for yourself.

Love and farewell from the darkness,
~SHAMARA AMBROSE~

I wish you would have made that into a couple of chapters at least. I really would love to know the back story. How close was she with the women he cheated with? How did she find out? How long did it take for her to reach the breaking point? It was good, but I felt cheated.