Woah! This is awesome! It sounds like something I would do, too :) But it's great. I loved the colors symbolizing things like his rose being black = death and all that. It was great.
Keep writing
~ionlyliveindreams

This is great.. really expressive.. great mental image...

great one, lots of emotions in there! loved it! and thanks for answering my questions, I think I can keep that secret ^_^
cio, hoellenwauwau

wow it truly captures a feeling of hurt. I love it! JUST WOW, I'm gonna add you to my favourite Authors...I know, i know, I haven't read a lot of your stuff yet but just wait, be patient I will tomorrow but I g2g now! ~_^ Great poetry.

Terrific piece. So many electrifying emotions here. Excellent job. I loved it.

This looks like the right format to me. 7-5-3-1. You really chose the perfect metaphor for your feelings.


~Heart of the Sword