I like the rhyming in this one (Hurrah! Kirsten finally likes rhymes!) because it really does a lot for the piece's mood. The repetition and rhyme really fit into the atmosphere, and I like it.

Kind of reminds me of the book 1984 in the idea that people are all mindless drones that are being controlled. Not sure if that's what you meant, but that's what I got.

Good poem, your right about all those things...Life has got lots of shitty consequences...

I like the scheme of this one...but at some points it seems to echo Shel Silverstein if he wrote for an older audience, a lot. I'm not sure you meant that or not when you wrote it...But it doesn't always work, IMHO. Otherwise, nicely structured. :)

You know, I quite enjoyed this poem. I dunno...it just has a charm to it that really clicked with me.

Good Job.

Cheers.

Great poem, Love the structure, Unique.

Hm interesting... i like the repetition of consequences possible. that makes your message quite clear. i also like the little rhyme scheme you've got going. quite a nice poem i must say! :)

(btw thanks for the review)

this interesting. i like the line "consequences possible" its an interesting idea. this poem sounds nice... it has a cool writing style. i like how you comprimise grammar... it actually works well in this...

very well done! nice flow ( i could almost sing this one). Nice words, nice flow , nice beat. Nice in general.

interesting, but well written, excellent job with the rhyming, have a gift for it, lmao, good flow too, nicely done