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| Old River 2005-06-21 ch 1,  | Dear Izzy, Wow, what a powerful story! It was awesome (except for what happened to the girl's mother...) I'll read some more of your work. Please feel free to check out my work. I think you might like"Reflectionz in a Broken Mirror". Well talk to ya later. ^__^ Peace n' Much Luv,Toshiro Furukawa |
| Calvin Wong 2004-07-19 ch 1,  | It's certainly not as bad as some diary stories, but it doesn't feel like you. Your poetry feels like you. Like some inner outpouring of your feelings. Your fiction feels drained; slightly lifeless. I'm sorry I can't be more positive. |
| Martinet Of the Order 2004-06-30 ch 1, | Yep, now I know what you mean by showing your progress as a writer. The Teacher at the ending was a nice touch, but the ending to the story itself was expected and not that well written. But everything that led up to it was nice and suspenseful. Imma go read all the others, and watch them get better and better... Cheers. |
| cynical-idealist 2004-06-17 ch 1, | Ah...this was very very good. Saya suka bagaimana kamu menggunakan diari "kakak" Khairin untuk menceritakan kisah kerogolannya oleh Rick. Cerita ini betul betul dapat menyentuh perasaanku. Keep up the good work. |
| Grey Falcon 2004-06-04 ch 1, | Like the way you did the diary format. And a rather unexpected conclusion...I wonder if the teacher is actually Khairin? Anyway, great work. |
| A. Perry 2004-01-02 ch 1, | Fascinating. |
| Mia Haider 2003-12-28 ch 1, | whoa. i liked it! short but meaningful! im 13 and i don't think id be able to write something so close to reality! |
| Aimee Raven 2003-11-21 ch 1, | hey..wadda hell I was quite sure I'd reviewed this..Anyway this is very good, seeing as you say you had a portected childhood and all, Shakila's feelings were somewat artificial..the jerk...and he raped her...its more like I'm gonna rip him apart...and thats light too, anyway it shows some form of society that is quite harsh...and it is written from a good pov. Love, Mia |
| giygas666 2003-11-19 ch 1, | Excellent story. Truly haunting. Chilling, in fact; I've never read anything quite like this. Now the Khairin's mother's (or rather grandmother's) attitude towards her makes sense. This is twisted and sick...and I love it! It's going to Favorites. In response to the teacher, I guess the moral is that some secrets aren't meant to stay secret forever... |
| Kimmie6 2003-11-17 ch 1, | oh wow! I didnt even expect the girl to be the daughter of her sister.. that was a great twist! Too bad you never finished it.. but the open ending in the school atmosphere was nice as well! It was very interesting to see the Islam point of view as well! Great story! Kimmie |
| Ellerfru 2003-11-08 ch 1, | Good story... |
| shady-humour 2003-11-06 ch 1, | hey! this is really good! will there ever been another chapter? |
| Viksy81 2003-11-06 ch 1, | This is a really good story |
| Gemema 2003-10-03 ch 1, | Nice story, although I kinda guess about Khairin about halfway through. Still, this was written really well. Great job. |
| Madame Ruby 2003-09-16 ch 1, | wow... This isn't fiction, this is REALITY. tiny details may have been changed, but the overall story is something that could happen (and probably has happened) to anyone. This was written very realistically, and I believe this kind of thing should be brought to the attention of more people, whether in fiction, or through the words of those who this has happened to. |