hehe, this is amusing, i love the way you write. it seems unfinished, and a bit surreal in some places, as if there isn't very much emotion on behalf of the characters. sappy endings are always a bit crazy, happily ever after, yeah right...continue writing, i want to find out what happens...

Okay, I thought this story was pretty darn good until about here, when Osric told his security officer to go and kill the farmer who asked for Acha's hand in marriage. The thing is, he didn't seem like that kind of guy at first. Osric sounded like the type who disapproved of how the slaves were treated and was an all-in-all good person; but now, he sounds like he's obsesses with getting Acha, so much that he'd kill for her. It's just a little disturbing...
I will go on to read the rest, now!

Well, good job with the universe... (good story, but I'm bad at this whole review deal)

Ah. More problems-- I was wondering where the plot would go after this.

Well, that takes care of the problem.

Still going...

Now it's moving.

A little Cinderellaesque right now... still going...

The messiah bit is sort of Dune-ish.

Good character sketches-- short chapters aren't necessarily a bad thing.

I love prologues, even if I can never write them...

awesome story. update!! update! update! now now now. jkjk. i loved your story.

I want to find out how Acha reacts when she finds out the king murdered her betrothed, and how she's going to fix things on her planet. What about her parents, too? How and where will they live?

So far it's interesting. You have set the worlds well.

No!
YOU FOL I WANT TO FIND OUT WHAT HAPPENS!
Seriously you can make this better. But please dont stop it or else im goin to have to finish it for u. Just add a little action or suspense to complicate things.