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| Twilight Starr 2008-07-03 ch 1,   | I like the title. Nice beginning. Good job! Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer. ~Twilight Starr~ |
| erin Jolley 2007-06-02 ch 3, | OMG!! i want to read more! this is awesome! |
| White Tyger 2003-12-29 ch 2, | Hey, great story so far. I love celestial stuff and Ireland, what can I say I'm Irish, and this story captures them both wonderfully. A little suggestion for future chapters, you might want to try getting into the main character's past, both her father and her mother. And it would be nice to know a little background on Chet, but that's just me and these are just suggestions. Either way, update soon :) |
| Novus Lacuna 2003-06-29 ch 1, | really interesting. being torn between to places. I hope this has more to come. |
| abeni 2003-06-29 ch 2, | another interesting one. you have great talent lil! this style of writing just isnt my scene. i cant relate to the 'princesses' and stuff. i guess its part of the fairytale world that i dont understand. anywho, im sure that others find this fantastic! |
| stargirl 2003-06-28 ch 2, | Great story!! I felt like I was really there!! |
| Meggi 2003-06-06 ch 2, | hey HEy that was a good one i love your stories keep it up your friend Meghan |
| wiccan child 2003-06-06 ch 2, | This is a very good story I was refered to you by my girl Sugar Baby33! Any way this story is awsome! You really should start to write more! |
| Carpe Nocturne 2003-06-03 ch 2, | Hi, Omg ur story was awsome i hope u keep writing, I know that I'll keep checking on it, & if u have time would u check my Story it's the Bracelet Of Truth. Bye Starlight Gem |
| EmNight87 2003-06-02 ch 2, | Well, I agree with the other reviews that you need more background. But I don't want you to simply explain it to me bluntly. Think creatively and come up with some way for us to see a picture of the past without just outright telling us. Examples: looking back in an old diary, dreams, daydreaming remembrances, ect.. |
| Third 2003-06-02 ch 1, | Nice description, but you have a tendencey to re-use words. It gets rather boorish. Find some new ones. There are more, don't worry. |
| Black Velvet Princess 2003-06-02 ch 1, | kewl, but u need more background, lotsa explaination. can't wait for the next chapter! |
| sugar baby33 2003-05-09 ch 1, | okay, tell me more on the background of this story. It all happens so fast. This part totally hooked me, I need more! |