Reviews for the ballad of the lonely walker

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shinco 2004-03-31 ch 1,	Oh, my gosh! That was so sad! And you know what amazes me? Your as old as me and you're THAT good! You're truly one of the best writers out there! I always love your work! It never ceases to awe me! Very nice poem as always!
Roadside Dryer 2003-10-28 ch 1,	Great I love it, awesomely great
glitterjewele 2003-09-03 ch 1,	such a powerful and truly moving story! it was very easy to experience the side of the woman, in particular. there's definitely some beautiful imagery. hmm where to start with the favorite lines . . . lol well first of all your title is very intriguing. :P after that, the parts that got to me most were "she only forgot, the most/important thing to remember," "a bullet in her head," "and stole her purple fan," and "for as she would rise to heaven/he would sink below." very nice piece. a few typos, but overall very well-written. liked it muchly. kudos. :)
hardac 2003-08-18 ch 1,	stunning! Well...I think it takes some trying and much time, to find the perfect mixture of flow and rhyme.
lele 2003-07-07 ch 1,	A really good poem-you can feel the sadness of the man, and the distress she feels as he GOES 2 HADES!! I really liked it.
tiger lily8 2003-06-20 ch 1,	Wicked! It's excellent. I tried writing something like this before, unfortunately it didn't work.
Salim Narek 2003-06-09 ch 1,	very tragic. I hate to be a killjoy, but i did notice a few grammatical errors. Also, you sacrificed flow for rhyme, which is worse than sacrificing rhyme for flow. Try slant rhyming, you don't have to be exact. Remember: I wouldn't say anything if I didn't think this was an awesome poem with only a few kinks in it. Keep up the great work! -Sal
Grendel 2003-06-06 ch 1,	I loved all the structure and the idea of it. Just one critic, you used the word "dead" too many times.
The Inklings Reborne 2003-05-29 ch 1,	wow...that's good...and so sad...I really liked it...there were a few minor things with the rhythm, but besides that it's simply wow...congradulations on a poem well done... .:Demosthenes:.
Soviet 2003-05-25 ch 1,	WOW this is deep... I love it... good job Tnx for your reviews btw
midnight dreams 2003-05-23 ch 1,	claps i love poems that have stories. :D Hehe...you even made it rhyme! I'm very impressed. :D Great job. Thanks for the review, it means alot. ^^ Continue writing.
Infinity Plus One 2003-05-23 ch 1,	how very sweet. so poetic. whenever i try to write a depressing poem, it always comes out all warped and disturbed and morbid and weird. so thats a very good job.
Dirty Wallpaper 2003-05-15 ch 1,	that was cool and it was definitely NOT bad victorian style, because i was very impressed. the story flowed nicely and the words which you used to rhyme it was perfect for the whole feel of the poem. the story which you chose to tell in it you told very beautifully and your language was very sensitve. the speech marks were great, they really showed the different perspecitves of the people. a very haunting poem, and they are always the best, you should do more of these, poems which tell are story are very moving as was this one. my fav lines would have to be... "Her life was the thing that she forgot; She’d left it her bed. Quietly, slumbering peacefully, A bullet in her head." - great poem, kudos -thanks for the review, appreciated it heaps :)
inklings (too lazy to sign ... 2003-05-13 ch 1,	Mallakie - well, since you gave us the time of day i would like to give you some back. But I can only submit this right now. I will continue later. Loved this. Very well written. really good.
annaicuru 2003-05-13 ch 1,	Confusing but very complex emotions involved. You did very well with the rhyming - that's something I can rarely get to work.. By the way you're becoming nearly as prolific as me! Keep it up. -- Annaicuru

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