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| silver 2003-07-05 ch 3,  | wow. this is sad and REALLY good. You should continue it. |
| Rei1 2003-05-11 ch 3, | um,yeah,I'm too lazy to sign in... For a little bit there,I was hoping this wasn't real.I sat there for a long time afterwards and just stared at the computer screen.Then I went back a few times and reread the first sentence of the summary, "My life story." And I tried not to cry. Now,no, I'm not going to be one of those people who sit there and say that I almost cried for you and how horrible that is and "Go with God," or something.Patrially because I don't believe in God and partially because I wasn't necessarily sad because of your life. I don't know if that sounds selfish or what. Your story brought up so many bad memories I've been trying to push back in my mind for a long time,but never really could. Like when my brother beats me up(I still have those bruises today...)or that time Dad poured his drink over my head,ice and all,and wouldn't let me get dried off.Or the way he used to beat Mom,among other things.Or when he whipped David.And everynight he's ever came home drunk.And that one time when I simple said David had called me"stupid" or something and no matter how much I begged, he took off his belt and closed the bedroom door and I didn't see David all night.Or how dad always used to knock me down and then step on my hair and pull on my arms. I never could do anything. And I felt helpless while I read this, like I was stuck there in that moment with you...and once again,I couldn't do anything... God I hate that feeling. I suppose the next chapter will have to do with drugs... Continue the story...Pain's the only thing that seems real right now... -Rei1 PS:You sound like someone I know...You even have the same name... Shinji: You ever notice how easy it is to pretend that you're okay? |
| tashmia 2003-05-10 ch 2,  | The writing is insanely real. I can actually feel some of the fear and the not understanding of life. The writing vividly describes something that very well could be your next door neighbor or that little boy you are never quite sure about. You can see it in your mind as you read...very well written |
| Twiztid 2003-05-10 ch 1, | gripping i could hear the screams in my head... |