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| The.Wizard.Pen.Dragon 2008-06-18 ch 1,  | abuseThat was pretty cool, I like the smooth rhyming and the never ending "the grass is always greener ..." message. Good job! Write on! Pen.Dragon |
| Rebecca Ward 2008-05-15 ch 1, | abuseThis is great! I love the repetition and imagery. Nice work. |
| freakanature14 2008-04-17 ch 1, | abusethat... was... ... (hold on, while I pick myself up from the floor) very, very funny. I loved it! i think my favorite lines would have to be 'I'd spend my whole day playing kanasta I betcha my teeth I'll out last ya' and 'And hey sweet thing, I need a scrub bath tonight'. Loved. It. Really. |
| Takhisis 2008-03-09 ch 1, | abuseWow!This poem is funny. Whoever heard of anyone who wants to become old? And your 'set' should be 'sat'. I think some of your lines are too long. You should split them up into two lines. Like the third line in the second stanza that goes : at 5pm I'd go to sleep... |
| LittleChoLo 2007-11-01 ch 1, | abuseYour poem makes being 75 sound like a very attractive prospect. My favourite line :"And hey sweet thing, I need a scrub bath tonight". Classic. It makes you wonder how they get so grumpy, doesn't it? That is, until you realise that some them don't have families, and their minds don't function as well as they ought, and they're ill (or have friends who are ill). Then it gets a bit sad. I'm really interested in your C2. I've written some humorous poems and I was wondering if you'd consider including any of them. |
| Luny Loona 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abuseI like the repetition of '75'. Most of the time, it would be better written as words, but seeing as you're emphasising it, it might not matter all that much. |
| Jeannie-Redd 2007-10-05 ch 1, | abuseVery funny and I like the rhyming scheme. I can't wait to be 75 now...you made life sound like a piece of cake when you're 75. =P ~Jeannie-Redd |
2005-09-28 ch 1, anon. | abusethis is hilarious |
| AnnaSun 2003-08-31 ch 1, | abuseHi, I like this poem alot. The last lines of each verse 'oh I wish I was 75' remind me of the style poet 'Pam Ayers' uses when quote 'I wish I had looked after me teeth.' A very humorous poem. Thanks :) |
| Deana Bell 2003-06-26 ch 1, | abuseAnother LOL. This was really creative. ~God bless~ |
| Kittioto 2003-05-17 ch 1, | abuse... ... ... ... ... BAHAHAAHAAHA! ~Falls off chair~ |
| chickadee 2003-05-17 ch 1, | abusethis is very cute...the rhyme scheme makes it hilarious: "I spend my whole day playing kanasta/ I betcha my teeth I'll out last ya." how long did it take you to think of that?? it's certainly original. :} and definitely funny. hope to see more poems from you soon. |
| not sure yet 2003-05-15 ch 1, | abuselmao, ok, again cute with a good rhythm to it |
| Needa S 2003-05-15 ch 1, | abuseThis is the best one I have read today.. Thumbs-up! |
| Liriel87 2003-05-14 ch 1, | abusethis is great. nice |