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| teresa7 2003-07-09 ch 1,  | abuseomg...THIS IS SUPERB! you nailed it right down. excellent description and I am glad that you gave such good imaginary. keep it up!! ~teresa~ |
| The Black Rider 2003-05-24 ch 1, | abuseSorry I've been gone for so long, but I love this poem. It has so much truth to it and you write with such passion...it's quite extraordinary. |
| glitterjewele 2003-05-23 ch 1, | abuseomg that was SO AWESOME. absolutely fantastic. gorgeous. and the end . . . i totally didn't see it coming, so when i read it, it was like reading some kind of grand revelation - so TRUE! i'm having trouble thinking of words worthy enough to describe this piece . . . they evade me. or maybe they don't exist. my favorite lines n' bits are as follows: "gently cutting your heart with its knife," (which is even better now that i understand what it means :P) "the moon is reflected in her piercing gaze/her mane shimmers like a thousand stars" (that was my favorite of the favorites - so gorgeous), "you fall to the ground in a helpless shiver," "a massive machine of muscle and bone" (in addition the the incredible image i got from that, it had a really nice rhythm to it), "screams, triumphantly defiant," "you are a minute worm," "twin pools of fire and rage," "your soul is inhaled by this fearful beast" (came in second place on the Favorite of the Favorites list by a hair), "a memory trapped in his eyes" (that was almost heartbreaking), "the unicorn with shimmering tail and mane/is the dragon whose steps shake the earth," "whose wings swirl the clouds above," "this two-faced beast is love." (you know, love really IS a two-faced beast - you're a genius for coming up with that.) *tummultuous applause* i absolutely LOVED this. it's a remarkable accomplishment. just to give you the heads up, i noticed in the last two stanzas (which were quite brilliant), you use "who's" when i think you meant to write "whose" ("who's" is a shortened form of "who is" whereas "whose" shows possession). otherwise, it's perfectly faultless. highly enjoyable. i am muchly delighted. a truly incredible read. AMAZING work. KUDOS! ! ! |
| obsidian katana 2003-05-22 ch 1, | abuseawesome poem! wonderfully written, great imagery, good descriptions. and very true about love. good job! |
| Jimmy Jazz 2003-05-21 ch 1, | abuseOh wow, amazing poem here, Excellent job. Well done. |
| Needa S 2003-05-18 ch 1, | abuseWow...One word to sum this up. Thumbs-up! |
| Keep it 100 2003-05-17 ch 1, | abuseWhat a great concept! You described both "faces" wonderfully. That last line was the last nail in the coffin, so to speak. It sealed this masterpiece. ~Heart of the Sword |