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| aleppine 2003-07-07 ch 1,   | I ADORE the first stanza ... and from a nocturnal creature, it's pretty sit-up-and-take-notice of you to write about it. Hehehe. Every part of that first stanza is brilliant. Artificial lights, subtle transitions, the lot. The second stanza is also great ... 'Ebbing like the surging motion of the tide' has a nice structure to it. Excellent. |
| QuillKitten 2003-06-26 ch 1, | Your descriptions were so realistic that I could picture exactly what you wrote. It was a truly beautiful poem. The flow was nice too, you didn't make the line too long, but it didn't have the cut off feel. The only problem was that the last too lines were sorta choppy and lost the flow. |
| cosmo-queen 2003-06-01 ch 1, | Excellent poem, I definitely agree with what you're saying. I believe that humans take nature in general for granted. I especially love a beautiful sunrise or sunset, they're so inspirational. As you can see, I'm a bit of a nature freak ;) Anyway, good work, keep writing :) *cosmo-queen* |
| wonky donkey 2003-05-19 ch 1, | God bless the sun. hey good poem,I love the sun at least I did, till I moved to Texas. Now if I go outside I risk instant skin cancer! Oh well good poem. |