This is almost too detailed, or rather, it's detailed the wrong way. It sounds more like a list of instructions than a love poem to tennis. You need to include images, not descriptions of exactly what you're doing. Select your images carefully. Also, at several points in this poem, you type 'you' instead of 'your'. Please, please, please proofread your work! Spelling errors are a sign of sloppy writing. (If I have inadvertently made a spelling error in this review, feel free to laugh scornfully, but do as I say, not as I do.) I like your use of the word 'love'; it adds an emotional element that is missing in the rest of the poem. Do a little more of that kind of thing, only be sure to show not tell.

Yours in writing,~pointythings~

This is an exceptional example of an extended metaphor. Me gusta mucha! (I like it a lot!)

tennis? i don't do tennis, but the poem was good1 :D

wow, its good. i would think it hard to make such a long poem, rhyming... about tennis. good job.

>mysterykittyx

Wow, that was incredible. I mean, you wrote about it like you were a combat correspondent (war journalist). Excellent. Well done.

Tennis is really fun. I'm not good at it, though. (Basketball is more of my thing.) Another job well done.


~Heart of the Sword

cool! i like this. nice how you incorporated more into this than just the game. good job!