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| Nephriteon 2004-10-03 ch 1,   | I love it. Need I say more? (probably since this is a review) I felt so drawn to what you had written. The opening paragraph was just so emotionally poignant, every moral fibre in my body was just screaming out to comfort the person who was writing this. "People around me cause me pain, anger, frustration, and sadness"- how treacherously truthful...couldn't have said it better myself. I think, I went through that phase in my life, like Desma, I really thought that the world was a cruel place to live. People are just so damn pretentious sometimes and in the end, its so difficult to trust anybody... Poor Lazen, he is such a gorgeoud character...but I liked the fact that she didnt kiss him. In reality, these two people would probably never meet again so there was no need to hold onto a white lie/promise, but still the ending is so heartfelt. It is such a realitic ending, I couldnt have asked for any other coz then it would just ruin the whole image and virtue of the story. I really love this story. Its perfect the way it is. |
| sinfullyours 2003-05-22 ch 1, | Hiyee love the story ^_^ So depressing at the start, I like sad, and then it gets happy at the end! I like the nothing will push her back part. Update!! |