actually its spelled phooka...but a cool story so far!

I believe your style, however you come by it, is to not just tell a story, but make the reader live it. Ofcourse, that's what every writers tries to do, but I think for you it's subconscious. Anyway, good job, I like it so far, but the goth chicks that are so common in the horror field are begininng to go the terrible way of cliche.

poor dante. unlucky esma.. hm. i have no clue where this review is going. stopping..
update soon! please

Aw, who knew a satanist could be so oodjum-puddum-tay? I want to schnoogle him for some reason. I'm going to stop using nonsense words now.

Great start, your a good writer, i hope the rest of the story is as good as the begining.

Looks like someone's been hittin' "They Fight Crime!" Heh...anyway, I like Library Guy. I dunno why. He's just kind of awkward. This frozen yogurt's disgusting. Ah...I caught the reference to my car (or lack thereof); it feels like we haven't had one since I was five. ^^