 Wrong Name Tag 2004-01-24 . chapter 1(I was reading things on here and a lot of it was really bad so I thought I'd come and read stuff by someone who I know has writings that are very good.)
I'm not as fond of this poem as "Drowning" but maybe that's because I just love drowning for the words and phrases in it. But this one is great, too. You're not bad with poetry! I loved the last stanza with this. It definitely ties the whole poem together and is a great concept. "Because maybe if I don't say a thing at all,/I won't feel so invisible." It's so true, too. Anyway, very nice little poem.
Kudos and daisies.
-Jess |
 Ellerfru 2003-06-25 . chapter 1good poem! though it's really sad. |
 Not Just a Little Girl 2003-06-09 . chapter 1I love this one because i can identify with feeling invisible.
...I just really love this poem! |
 Children of the Root 2003-05-23 . chapter 1interesting way to see it. The last part where you say "Because maybe if I don’t say a thing at all, I won’t feel so invisible." Most people would say that saying nothing makes you invisible. But being ignored when you do say something is a worse invisible than not saying anything and just blending in. |
 LikeableTarsier 2003-05-23 . chapter 1I've felt like that before...
This is a great poem, really gets your point across and the tone conveys your message, without being annoyingly angsty. (angst is good.. m) |
 iridium 2003-05-22 . chapter 1I can really empathize with this poem; it really describes what happens to me in school. People are quick to judge someone who looks or acts a little bit different from the norm. I have a hard time with the popular ** because, since I don't buy expensive Abercrombie&Fitch clothing, they refuse to talk to me, which is really annoying if I'm working in a group on a project or something. Whoo, run-on sentence. ^_^;
iri |