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| tenshiamanda 2004-02-23 ch 7,   | Now this is a good story, rich characters and a great universe you've created. You've obviously put a great deal of thought in and its worth it. |
| fluffy gizmo 2003-11-06 ch 6, | great chapter - lots of new twists! Damm Jook : doesn't he know not to accept weird ol amulets from strange little old fogies in funny robes? silly boy! |
| Crucified Sanctity 2003-08-07 ch 6, | I have a feeling that medallion is more than that old man said after all old men lie a lot... well some do... OK so they dont but old men can be evil sometimes... Whatever :P - Crucified Sanctity - |
| Crucified Sanctity 2003-08-06 ch 5, | Azek is really disgusting! But I think he'll turn out nice in the end... Only one more chapter befpre I have to stop reading this *whimpers* - Crucified Sanctity - |
| Crucified Sanctity 2003-08-06 ch 4, | Those people in the bar are mean... people... Aw Yiou-Lex is really nice ^-^ - Crucified Sanctity - |
| Crucified Sanctity 2003-08-06 ch 3, | Hm... I think the turghs control the "freedom" of the market ^-^ I'll read on and have a looksee shall I? Still like Jook lol - Crucified Sanctity - |
| Crucified Sanctity 2003-08-04 ch 2, | Hehehe ^-^ I cant help but like assassins ^-^ Jook I think it was ^-^ - Crucified Sanctity - |
| Crucified Sanctity 2003-08-04 ch 1, | This is such a cool story ^-^ I especially like how you've made it a bit less like Earth in just little ways such as the slaves. They are, I assume, suppose to look like humans but thier hair and eyes are different... You have created personalities so well! I have a mental image of the guards even though you haven't described them... - Crucified Sanctity - |
| fluffy gizmo 2003-07-10 ch 5, | Ep! dont kill him off please! really good emotions in this chapter.^-^ |
| greenfroggies 2003-07-08 ch 4, | Yay! Another brill chapter - keep it up. The only thing i woul say is that in places you might want to find alternative words as you repeat 'cell' and another one which i cant remember. apart, fabywabbyabby |
| fluffy gizmo 2003-06-03 ch 3, | this is good, looking 4ward 2 the nxt chptr! |
| greenfroggies 2003-06-02 ch 3, | go lara, go lara, go, go, go, go lara! Wicked! I love your story - write, write, write, write! |
| Riv 2003-06-01 ch 1, | a great story line i am still confused what these creatures are |
| fluffy gizmo 2003-05-29 ch 2, | this is so good, i still love all ur diff characters! i wanna know what will happen NOW! |
| greenfroggies 2003-05-28 ch 2, | Really cool - go gollum go gollum! You have to write the next chapter before the end of the hols |