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| cloner 2008-04-07 ch 28,  | Aw, I'm totally shocked :O I understand completely that Jared couldn't live... I was thinking at the end of the 27th chapter that it would have a rushed ended but I was pleasantly surprised by it. I think as a story as a whole, I liked the mystery that was made and how Jared and Zain's characters always were moving near and then far from each other at times. It was a really good story with nice reasonable sized chapters. The only thing is obviously spelling and grammar, which in time would hopefully be edited? Oh and how was New Zealand? |
| Cloner 2008-04-06 ch 17,  | I'm not feeling very happy about this. Is this a sign that they're all linked- like if Jared dies, Zain does and vice versa? |
| Cloner 2008-04-06 ch 14, | ...I still prefer Jared. |
| Cloner 2008-04-06 ch 13, | 13's a cool number :D Now I REALLY don't like him |
| Cloner 2008-04-06 ch 10, | Um...shit? My head hurts now! Are they one, are they not... And I trust Jared. I don't like Zain. |
| Cloner 2008-04-06 ch 9, | That is kinda a cool power. I wouldn't want it though. I have violent thoughts XD |
| Cloner 2008-04-06 ch 7, | I REALLY don't like Zain now -.- He's so...slimy >. |
| Cloner 2008-04-06 ch 6, | Zain did it!! Or his cronies :D Ooh, the discription of Jared ingeries were really good-it actually made my stomach turn. |
| Cloner 2008-04-05 ch 4, | Gah he scares me :O And I think the phrase is "shit-stirring"?! |
| Cloner 2008-04-04 ch 3, | You've done what you intended to do. I'm now curious over Jared... *eyes dart around* For the record, I'll probably be making random comments throughout the thing. And I believe you made a couple of minor typos. |
| Cloner 2008-04-04 ch 1, | Just to let you know, I didn't forget ;) I've just been really busy. I will admit, you've got me hooked ;) I love the first bit, with the thing about she's so like her mother. And it really did create a hell of a lot of empathy. I'm now curious. Reading time ;) |
| Dark Side Luke 2004-01-09 ch 2, | I am definetly intrigued. While I was reading this, I was able to feel how the main character felt: confused, terrified, pained...all of that and more. Turly, this is a brilliant piece of fiction. There are a few spelling errors here and there, some of which could be caught by a simple read-through, but other than that there is nothing wrong with this. When I find the time, I'll read the rest and I'm definetly going to find the time. Great work. ~DSL |
| Brittany 2003-12-07 ch 28, | Wow, it's kind of hard to tell who was really bad and who was really good, but that is as it should be because nothing is black and white. I still don't quite understand exactly what Zain was doing or why he had to die, but the ending is very poignant. |
| avani.neglect 2003-11-28 ch 1, | Ok...here's a review... WHERE'S THE LAST CHAPTER?! |
| yv 2003-11-02 ch 25, | great! do continue =] |