I know I should be getting a deepe meaning, but I'm failing to. I do like the dialogue you create. :)

Elisabeth

OOh...I like the way this story is written. I love the way you describe the water when Lily is pretending to be the dolphin~ It's very descriptive imagery.
Keep Writing,
~*SableTrumpetress

Very cute! Very much like experiences I had with my siblings. You wrote it well, and I had a great time reading it!

Your line, "This is where the playing ednded and the becoming began" is one of the best lines I've ever read, in any piece of fiction, anywhere, ever! Wonderful beginning. Please keep writing.

Quite good! Exactly how many reviews have I started with that? Ah, well. I like this story- some of Lily's lines sounded a bit mature, though. Other than that, very good.

P.S. I have some new poems up you might like. :)